NaPoWriMo 2023 Day 4

Photo taken near Weisbach, Germany.

Another day, another prompt. Today was the Triolet—a favorite of one of my oldest and dearest poetry writing partners.

A triolet is an eight-line poem. All the lines are in iambic tetramenter (for a total of eight syllables per line), and the first, fourth, and seventh lines are identical, as are the second and final lines. This means that the poem begins and ends with the same couplet. Beyond this, there is a tight rhyme scheme (helped along by the repetition of lines) — ABaAabAB.

Triolets were in vogue among the Victorians — all those repetitions can add a sort of melancholy gravitas to a poem, but watch out! They can also make the poem sound oddly gong-like. This was the challenge for today.

I will hopefully find time to revisit later in the evening, but I wanted to post my first attempt immediately just to show you that poems don’t have to be perfect to bring you joy in the writing process. What a fun way to start my morning!

Beauty in Treachery

The half moon winked and glistened bright,
casting her spell o’er earth below;
treacherous roads belied by light.
The half moon winked and glistened bright
as shadows shifted shape and sight;
we slept in bliss, no need to know.
The half moon winked and glistened bright,
casting her spell o’er earth below.

—Carla Jeanne

2 thoughts on “NaPoWriMo 2023 Day 4

  1. Great job on the Triolet! I appreciate the explanation of the form and the caution about the repetitive lines potentially sounding gong-like. Your poem “Beauty in Treachery” really captures the mood of the prompt. My question for you is, what inspired you to choose the theme of treacherous roads for your poem?

    Yoy Edib

    • Thank you for your encouraging words. Every now and then I write down thoughts for poetry and save them in the notes section of my phone. At the end of February we had a terrible (and beautiful) ice storm that took out power for a couple of days. I wrote down the idea of beauty in treachery at that time and it inspired me today. Voila! A triolet! 🥰❤️

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